smym-d-f

=Show me your moves=

Design Doc feedback

 * one sentence - need a few more words, e.g. theme park, zombies, ...
 * good abstract
 * why is it in a theme park? (John)
 * a bit confused: is my primary aim to destroy the zombies or escape the park?
 * 'civilians' sounds like you mean 'citizens'
 * it is nice to see some imagery, ta.
 * well done on the drawings
 * good storyboards

A generally good document. Replace the ppt with imagery on the page, as it relies on the reader having MSOfis2007. Or use Googledocs (no, just use embedded imagery, Googledocs is daft ...)

draft mark: 40%

final comments - what I am left wondering is whether this is too much detail or too little. It could be a very silly, small game in Flash, or something bigger on a DS. but I find it difficult tos cope its size, duration, playability, etc. The idea is clear, but I have trouble defining exactly what kind of game it is, or who it is therefore for. You need to sell the idea better, perhaps with less detail, or better detail.

final mark: 50%