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Tech Doc Feedback

 * Document is supposed to be an e-document (HTML pages) rather than downloadable PDF
 * Font looks nice and fancy, but hellish to read ... makes it quite difficult to validate the contents. A tech document should probably have a very standard easy-to-read font, preferably sans-serif
 * Do you know if J2ME and SDL work together? I know of both APIs but not sure if they work together (Derek)
 * Are you really intending to create a web browser, or is this running inside an existing web browser ...
 * Why did you choose Google Maps ... there are others. What makes Google Maps the best for you?
 * The paragraph that begins "Client polling ..." is true in theory, but I'll bet it's not that easy in practise. Beware of believing the blurb
 * There's lots of instances of words after words after words ... space it out with some diagrams that can clarify what you mean
 * MP3 licensing issues ... ?
 * 128kbps is not CD quality (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Data_rate_units) ... not sure if FM is 64 - where did you get this information?
 * Server bandwidth requirements ... why? Is this a guess or did you research to get these values?
 * PCs and monitors are not staff afaik
 * Financial model - needs expanding. VAT included? Where are you developing this since you have no rent included. Why do you need the hi-spec PCs? Payback model, where are you getting the money from the users, apart from the DLC? General software requirements ... paint packages etc.?

In general: Change the font, add diagrams, reduce words, how much money will you make out of this, justify what you've said.

//Draft Mark: 35%//

Final Feedback: This really is a great improvement over your draft submission. You have clearly given a lot of time and effort to come up with a very good technical document. The main issue though is still a lack of diagrams, but the extra whitespace has helped spread the text out to make things more readable.


 * Final Mark: 70%**