knights-d-f

=Knights who say Ning!=

Design document feedback

 * good start; made me snigger ...
 * there will/might be some IP issues to clear re characters and back story
 * emmm ... what's the game?
 * the levels appear very short; how long will the game be played for? it all sounds very lol, but I am struggling with the game concept
 * I think, reading storyboard, I begin to see the game - but is it the same game you are thinking of?

There is some truly excellent content here. But the details are hidden around the document, making it hard to think the who, what, when and where of actual game playing. But, don't be depressed about this, as we reckon it is addable (is that a word?). And, the IP issues may prove tricky.

Draft mark: 40%

Rework:

You have now covered the issues raised in the draft comments. The site begins to look like a game spec, and the game begins to appear. Not sure what some of these weird sound objects were (ads?). Great character specs, use of dry humour and good pile of storyboards. All-in-all, a good doc, needs a bit more erlated to the final game so that the reader can 'see' the game, perhaps through screen mockups (then again, if the sofwtare had worked you *would* have this.)

Final grade: 70%