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=DarkStorm Design=

Design Doc feedback
The document is very heavy on back story. Indeed, it reads more like a short story with some game ideas. Mebbes put the document together in a different way: story then game. And make it a 10:90 split in size. You do need to control the verbiage or rather than selling the game idea you can put the reader off. Less is more.

So, I'd like to have seen more pictures and less words, more gameplay and less story.

final grade: 50%